I really enjoyed this piece. It flowed smoothly, and the details, particularly, are so vivid.Jack's willingness to be a part of something is a feeling that I think readers will resonate with. You capture the office dynamics in a pandemic so well. The HR cliffhanger also worked really well! I'm curious to know about what will happen regarding that, and I'm also eager to learn more about Jack.
I enjoyed your story, Wayne. It flowed very naturally. I identified with Jack. There is a lot of information that is usually communicated through body language that is not communicated adequately over zoom calls that it often makes it challenging to read the room. Throw in social awkwardness and you have a perfect recipe for misunderstanding.
Wayne, you really had me rooting for Jack… and then wincing like I was watching someone step on a rake in slow motion. The whole lockdown vibe, the tiny-screen friendships, the one stray joke that ruins the weather — you captured it so well. Curious (and a bit scared) to see what HR has waiting for him in part 2.
I really enjoyed this piece. It flowed smoothly, and the details, particularly, are so vivid.Jack's willingness to be a part of something is a feeling that I think readers will resonate with. You capture the office dynamics in a pandemic so well. The HR cliffhanger also worked really well! I'm curious to know about what will happen regarding that, and I'm also eager to learn more about Jack.
I enjoyed your story, Wayne. It flowed very naturally. I identified with Jack. There is a lot of information that is usually communicated through body language that is not communicated adequately over zoom calls that it often makes it challenging to read the room. Throw in social awkwardness and you have a perfect recipe for misunderstanding.
Thank you for reading and for your feedback.
Wayne, you really had me rooting for Jack… and then wincing like I was watching someone step on a rake in slow motion. The whole lockdown vibe, the tiny-screen friendships, the one stray joke that ruins the weather — you captured it so well. Curious (and a bit scared) to see what HR has waiting for him in part 2.
Thanks for reading Asuka.
You’re welcome, Wayne~