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Louis Urbanowski's avatar

As someone with pure Obsessional this was scarily accurate and a little too close for comfort on a cold Tuesday morning. Excellent work, Wayne!

Wayne Exton's avatar

Thanks for that Louis - I was a mental health support worker as a young man and this was based on someone I supported. Working with him left an impression on me.

Louis Urbanowski's avatar

Respect! Followed and subbed. Will keep reading.

Caroline Osella   (they/them)'s avatar

His sister 😭 😂 - well drawn with a single utterance. Great story.

Wayne Exton's avatar

Thank you Caroline, and thanks for subscribing.

jtlinthemaking's avatar

👏👏👏👏👏

I love this. Brilliant writing. The tension is incredible.

Wayne Exton's avatar

Thanks so much!

AsukaHotaru's avatar

That one pen loose in the house, oh no..! That got under my skin sooo bad..!

Wayne Exton's avatar

❤️ ❤️

Ruth O'Reilly's avatar

What a hauntingly precise depiction of Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder (OCD) and the exhausting cycle of ritualistic checking. I like how you turned a mundane object like the humble pen into a potentially dangerous weapon. Great pacing too mimicing the racing mind and almost allowing us as readers to experience it. 👌🏼

Wayne Exton's avatar

Thanks Ruth!!